bubblewrapped

OK, so its kind of...weird. And I freely admit its not deep; its a warm-up poem. The creative juices arent flowing yet after months of being on sabbatical. But it ...

Cheers C.L. :) I used your suggestion for the rearrangement of 'of your dim colours" - I think it works better on the next line; ta! :D

Thanks Trinity! I've just edited it somewhat, so -prods- anyone? What dyou think?

Dialectic feminism! Honestly. What are you, some kind of genius? No, wait, I know the answer to that one already. Show off. :wink: Anyway, dont worry, I'm nowhere near as ...

I hated it. No, really. :^o 8-[ Regardless of the finesse, however, it kind of struck me as being...pointless - and the last stanza was too abrupt for my tastes. ...

:shock: I think I need to check that I really am still alive, and not in a coma having hallucinations. You didnt just say something nice , did you, Incandescence? ...

Damn but you're good! I have to say this is one of my favourites by you. Hell, one of my favourites on the entire board. Love it. Keep up the ...

Thanks, both of you. It has been too long! But I'm back again at last :). Odd thing is, I was actually writing about a little figurine when I wrote ...

The truth and nothing but the truth - so I suppose it has a ring to it. Personally I think its not one of my best efforts, but it does ...

Cheers, convintojm. I've altered 'despite itself' but I've just got in from an hour of hard work in the garden so dont expect any miracles.

You're right, the flagrant rambling-ness was intentional. I was trying to scare up inspiration, LOL, as well as trying to write around someone chatting on the phone as well as ...

Welcome, of course. I thought that's what you meant (about the 'name in your arms' thing) but perhaps you could make it a bit clearer, even to the point of ...

Wow, Incandescence actually said something moderately nice! LOL. Anyway, I've played with the ending a wee bit, its still quite a bit like the previous version though. Not sure whether ...

You're welcome Soyala :) Hope I wasnt too blunt though lol. I like it quite a bit better now you've made those changes. Its more coherent and you stick to ...

Well Sam, I know I'm not supposed to argue with you, but I would like to point out for the record that things that are ugly can be beautiful - ...