c.tyler

Overall very good grammatically. I spotted a couple of run-ons and added commas A dog barks occasionally , and a stray cat pads across the street. I arrive at the ...

Overall very good. I only have a couple of suggestions. [b] I pass the portraits of my father’s parents and my mothers parents. I had seem them all before. All ...

I've been out training for awhile, so I've been off the boards for some time. I have a couple weeks off so hopefully I'll have time for some more posts. ...

Thanks for all the input. What are some good resources for learning about show vs tell? I've got 3 chapters written and somewhat edited. If anyone wants I can email ...

If the cops found her than maybe she would cast a spell or two and turn them into frogs. I think "than" should be "then".

This is just an intro for a story that I am working on. This is the first writing project I have done so please criticize as much as possible. ---------------------------------------------------------

I agree it is a good start, but it is a bit confusing about 6 paragraphs into it. In my opinion, character development should take time.