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Well, I'm very inerested in this musical idea (it's something I'm considering myself) so I'm going t be very harsh. And feel free to PM me if you need any ...

I quite liked it. You said you had no tune, have you got oe now? Because I was using a simple tune and it worked for the entire song. The ...

I'm not going to comment on your writing, since it seemed pretty good to me. But there are other things I'm going to say. I didn't really understand this. It ...

Before I critique this, I'd like to remind you that here on YWS we have a two for one reviewing policy. That is to say, you need to review two ...

It's kind of funny. Before I left this morning I was lloking at this and decided to critique it once I got home. Well, here you go. And I don't ...

I liked this. It's not what you usually see songs about, but it was good. I could get a tune in some places, but in others I was stuck. I ...

Cute. I really liked this. I'm afraid I'm not a good critiquer of poetry, but I'll try my hardest. Her gran may not know what they are This line doesn't ...

Well, I finally got around to critiquing this. Here I go... The sky was dark overhead, and the acidic stench of blood and dark magic made it hard to breathe. ...

Haha! I loved it. It was so funny. I'd work a bit on your rythm, I really had trouble in some places being able to makes it flow, but overall ...

Jus so you know, I'm going to crit this poem as lyrics, since you replied to my lyrics critique request thread. Now... onto my critique! Overall, I liked it. I ...

This is going to have to be a quick review because I have to get ready for school soon. Here I go! The hospital light bathes me in a sort ...

I really like this. I hope you write more, it's really good. Is this your first time writing lyrics? Okay now I'll try to be critical. He sees me beautiful. ...

I'm not sure I found this very interesting. It wasn't frightening, and it was pretty boring, to be honest. Daniel signed heavily and put the phone down; his office was ...

I like this, but I think it needs to be longer. Put in some more emotions and descriptions, extend it a little bit, and it should be great. It was ...

It's alright. My first bit of advice it to capatialize. It's very annoying to read a song with no capitals. Now, onto the critique. shes looks outside her window, hoping ...