confusedstitch

Ello because of your request I shall review at the start it sounds like your going to do it as a kai telling the story from her present time but ...

ello twisted i am going to review your first chapter so here i go first your second sentence need to start with a capital As second the "as he landed ...

I really like the story it has a really nice layout but I think you can go a little more descriptive on the characters put other than that it was ...

i really like this one because it there with out being notice it just a plain disguise in plain sight at first sight you would just think it was the ...