convintojm

it felt bumpy and inconsistent. the patterned stuructured first stanza followed by less structured other stanzas bothered me.

way too short and way too simple. i don't even think i can get a feel for the poem to tell if it has potential from that. needs some serious ...

ok went back and added commas where i would intend for a pause. i do understand the need for them but i'm horrible at ever remembering to use punctuation. so ...

beautiful to read but one thing that bothered me was "black as the air at night" i didn't really like the wording or even the metaphor itself.

The touch of your hand holds my mind in place has we float above the ground, i think you mean as not has it was ok overall. there was too ...

interesting but vague maybe too vague

i think it'll work best along side the picture but it does a really godo job of painting a picture by itself. one thing though... "i wonder of they weep" ...

it's straightfoward and a bit too sweet. i can't say what to improve because it's just i'm not really digging it and i have a hard time making suggestions for ...

seemed too straightfoward and very very predictable

nice and rather light which is a bit uncommon from you but good none the less.

it didn't keep my attention very well. it has the potential to be really interactive and like toy with the reader but it doesn't really.

it wasn't bad considering the restrictions placed on it but the flow was interrupted by the form

absolutely beautiful. the flow of words and their very sound (i felt complelled to read it aloud) are a pleasure.

it's interesting and i like the idea but it didn't really capture me. the tone as lovely but because it's so general it seems too light.

there's defintly some really good lines in there. overall i don't really know how i feel on it but parts of it really strike me. as for what you're getting ...