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Re: A Letter to Satan
A kid writing a letter to Satan instead of Santa could be an easily made mistake. At least Satan got Joyce what she truly wanted: A pony. That ending was ...
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Re: (the shadow crown book draft) chapter 3
Deianara wants to help them? That was unexpected, but…pleasantly unexpected. It’s great to have an ally like her around. More dangers might arise because of this, but even then, it’s ...
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Re: Re: Eloise Meets Alastair
I decided to check this out since I like vampires…and I’m intrigued. Eloise’s life is never going to be the same again, especially with the moments of time slipping in ...
Jul 12, 2023 -
Re: (the shadow crown book draft) chapter 1;2
I’d like to see a continuation of this story. Deianara and Caerwyn definitely have history with each other. Does Reyna not trust the princess enough that she lies about her ...
Jul 11, 2023 -
Re: Chapter 4
Annabel tasted freedom for just a few minutes, but Elijah had taken her away. :( It seems like she’ll have to wait out on an escape even longer or risk ...
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Re: Archer's Paradox Chapter 5: Misfire
To answer your questions: Jay’s conclusions are explained well, the city seems very haunting, and the details are enough. Being in the city he was as The Ghost will challenge ...
Jul 9, 2023 -
Re: Chapter 3
Oh man…things are not looking good. I’m unsure on whether Elijah should be trusted. For her own safety, Annabel should just trust herself. Maybe she could bring someone with her ...
Jul 8, 2023 -
Re: The Spooky Squad: Chapter 4
That ending was epic! My favorite part was when Hannah fought Beau. I also liked that you included the biblically accurate angels, The Thrones. Not too many people describe angels ...
Jul 7, 2023 -
Re: Chapter 2
Poor Victor…he was so hopeful about escaping. Why did Elijah have terror in his eyes? If he actually feels bad for the children, he’d do something to help them. But ...
Jul 6, 2023 -
Re: Chapter 1
Beautifully written and tragic. Why would Annabel and the other children be locked away from their families? What kind of monsters would do that to a group of children? I’ll ...
Jul 5, 2023 -
Re: Archer's Paradox Chapter 4: Stormy Night
I think that the hallucination is a good addition to the story. It’s not distracting. I think that the chapter leading up to the news about Cupid doesn’t need any ...
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Re: Whispers of the Deep
It is quite eerie how we know more about Space than the ocean. The ocean is here, on Earth. Space is far away and yet… I think that the midnight ...
Jul 3, 2023 -
Re: a_partofmyjourney
That’s so cute! :) I like how the narrator sees the celebrity crush as someone who will bring them happiness through music, as a fond memory to have. It’s always ...
Jul 2, 2023 -
Re: Adventures of an AL Chapter 10.
Cooper was able to fight the Demigods, but now Cooper is all alone. On top of that, he broke into a million pieces. He could get teleported to somewhere else, ...
Jul 2, 2023 -
Re: Adventures of an AL Beta chapter 9.
The implants rejected Cooper once, but they won’t reject him again. Or will they? Probably not. He is the supposed Bone God, so he might be fine. Or because he’s ...
Jun 30, 2023
