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crescent

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: purifing fire

    This was indeed kind of rude.

    Feb 26, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Health Re: SHOT! (Orientation)

    Hi, traveler! I like how you wrote in second person; it's not a commonly used tense. I've only read one novel written in second tense before. It feels like I'm ...

    Sep 21, 2012
  • Other » Realistic, Dramatic Re: How We Ended Up Here

    There's something about this piece that is so raw and moving. It's believable and convincing. Good job on capturing the realism of life. I really hope this wasn't from personal ...

    Jun 6, 2012
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: You don't care

    :D

    May 25, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Three Words

    Very cute. I love how I can feel the anxiety and how nervous the narrator in this poem where the words aren't even mentioned. Your description is awesome. The flow ...

    Apr 5, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Hollow

    I love the way this poem flows.

    Apr 5, 2012
  • Poetry » Politics, Realistic Re: Smoke

    Poetry is not my expertise, but the rhyming here feels a bit forced. Try to find a way to make the rhyming more organic if possible.

    Apr 5, 2012
  • Lyrics » Romantic, General Re: Hey gentleman (I fancy you)

    I dare you to do this in real life at least once in your life. xP

    Mar 8, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: Winter's Poem

    I really like the way this reads; your use of language is so elegant. My favorite lines are 1 and 5. There's missing punctuation on third line. :/ (A winter ...

    Feb 1, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Puzzle

    Hello there. I love the symbolism/metaphors in this poem. It was lovely. Hope the writer's block stays away! (not here to review)

    Oct 1, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Star Crossed: Chapter Two

    Grammar: Since her death, the start of every Spring broke my heart. Shouldn't be capitalized. He and I were separated by some imagined wall from since I could walk or ...

    Sep 29, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: A Love Letter to You

    This is beautiful. It's a very original and heartfelt love poem. (Not here to review)

    Sep 20, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Return What's Mine

    This was for the Big Random Story contest, so I don't know if I'm allowed to edit it and I have exactly 1000 words. :/

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Lights and Colors

    The shopping district was gloomy and only its lights made its sufferable. Typo. You added an extra "s" in "its".

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: [Post Deleted]

    All I have to say is, "beautifully written".

    Apr 18, 2011


The simple truth is that authors like making people squirm. If this weren't the case, all novels would be filled completely with cute bunnies having birthday parties.
— Brandon Sanderson, Alcatraz Versus the Evil Librarians