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Thanks for the review!

Thank you so much for the help!

Thanks for the review!

Thanks so much for your help!

Thank you for the review!

Thank you!

Thank you so much for the review!

Thank for your review! Could you please give me some specific examples of the weird word usage?

Thank you so much for your review! And, yes, I was totally shooting for medieval times. I think I sometimes do it a bit unconsciously though- I just love that ...

"brilliant... But we’ll" *but shouldn't be capitalized I couldn't find any other grammar mistakes. You did a good job using the examples of pranks to describe Asteria's and Adrian's relationship. ...

This chapter is just as great as all the others!

"I close my eyes and wait...But his voice trails off." *no need to capitalize that b in but One thing you might want to pay attention to is that you ...

Yes, you get to the point. You show how Asteria can't even think at the moment. But, while keeping it short, I would at least describe how she is feeling. ...

Thank you for your review! And I've recently published section #8! Please take a look!

Thank you for the review! I will try and do my best to fix what you have mentioned. I am glad to have you point of view because no has ...