danster724

I think your trying new kind of poetry idea is really cool. If I knew anything about haikus I would review these but honestly I have no idea how to ...

This isn't a real review I just wanted to point out that "the island" is 1. a very generic name and 2. has been used for several different novels and ...

"Yet the intent with which they were marching gave the notion that a worn path was not of the essence." I would revise that sentence to make it more understandable, ...

Hi! Nice job! Quote: emotionless drones- an army of clones The unintentional rhyming seems to throw off the mood that you are trying to set for me. Try using a ...

Overly simplistic ryhme scheme, but for a funny poem it was quite good. Maybe sharpening up the words a bit soit flows better in places would be good, but I ...