darthsythious

I like the begining when she comes outside into the town, it is a nice discribtion of the town waking up. But, when Ruslan comes seems abit rushed and Amarie ...

I like it, very interesting. I would like a better discription of this mysterious stranger though. I hope he comes back later, i think he will but that is again ...

It is a very nice began but I agree with Dream of the Faith above when he said that you gave too much background. I say that you wait and ...