dec12

Hey dec12 here So first off I will not be commenting on any punctuation or grammar as I stink at that stuff! I like where you were going with this ...

I've read another chapter of the story I think it's the next chapter but so far I like it. i'm still not really sure where the stories going? after reading ...

overtaking In the first paragraph should be overtakes "My mind goes haywire. I cannot comprehend what has been told to me. First my brother signs himself away to the army ...

Hey there I'm dec 12 just wanted to drop a quick review. First off I'm a stickler for tenses in stories and yours is a little confusing it seems to ...

Hey there I'm dec12 I just want to start by saying I'm impressed with what I've read so far it's good one of the best stories I've read I look ...

Hey there dec 12 here You do a good job of leavening us wondering what this Christian is going to say it makes me want to read more. However I ...

Hey there Sooo I like the setting and the initial story line but there's definitely some things to work on There seems to be some jumping around in the tenses ...

Hey there Just curious is this a short stoy ? It seems a little unfinished to me. It understand that you are building up to it being his old house ...

Wow this gave me chills !!! It was so good. There are a few minor spelling errors and such but nothing major. If you see my other reviews you'll know ...

Hey there I like the chapter it creates suspense and mAkes me want to read more ! Some things I enjoyed were the flash back to everyday life and the ...

Hey there dec 12 here First off I like that you jumped into a story in the first chapter it catches the readers eye instead of dragging on about the ...