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hello :) again this was really good! :D I love the fact that you are giving the other characters a chance to shine through, by only mentioning Lizzie but not ...

omg again raellly good. black pencil might be right, but I don't care! I am loving your book soo much! can't wait to read more. The others are shinning through ...

Hello. As everyone else has stated, not bad for your first whole poem. listen to sexisadi. she has said it all for me. It's basically the grammar and structure, but ...

yay, it's really good. I like the discussion at the end, becuase you can see more of the other characters like I explained before, but it's easier with no Lizzie ...

I like this because it shows reality in another format it;s an interesting interpretation a very interesting one I really wouldn't expect that, when you hear the words bird song ...

I agree with the comments above I thought it was sad and sweet. I thought that it was possibly lacking a little bit of information I don't know but you ...

Oh my god I love doctor who. and that was truly amazing i could totally imagine it the whole thing but then liking the program helped it don't think it ...

Hey what gave you the inspiration, very unique and unexpected from a poem gathering that you take an interest in trains? yet whenever anyone writes something, it always has to ...

everyone else has done all the nit picking now so there isn't much left for me to say but I can praise. This poem is very good, I connected with ...

this is really sweet, and very sad the other people have done all the nit picky stuff so I'm over with that. I like the fact it's based on judging ...

Awwwwwwwwwwwwr that is so sad for your first time, it really is very good. your enjoyment has certainly paid off so has your reading I love the idea, that you ...

Hello :D I really like it. It sounds really good. It sounds like it came from the heart! I really really really like the fact that it shows that you ...

Hello. Very interesting way of writting. It makes me think of the poem Batter my heart by John Donne BATTER my heart, three person'd God; for, you As yet but ...

Hello. This is a lot better, a lot lot better. I have only jsut read them both recently so I have compared, and I am glad to see that people ...

Hello. This is a truly spectacular poem. Very short. Short but sweet, and thats how I like it. I am fed up of looking for short poems, so I am ...