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Well if it got you out of writer block then brilliant. I found this light hearted not very well written but a good humourous peice. If you wanted to make ...

I meant no offence, just at fourteen I couldn't write worth squat lmao. :P God I've changed so much. Still pick them up nowagain :).

Okay, I'm new fan, I speak saying fan as this is very remarkably written :). I like how ya start, it's an effective hook, catching attention, and showing this ain't ...

^ Will learn in time :P. (Twit, I speak from years before being just like ya :P. So just give in. For it'll be funny when it happens :P.)

^ Is as pessimistic as ever :P! (Poor Twit, someday :P!)

^ Has totally made me blush (... Wow... that's best one I've got yet... heh)

Hmm, far too much telling in this and not enough showing. I begin with that because it's important. Next point, never use elipces in anything but speech or thought. In ...

^ Known for being in Uni, too early in my opinion :/...

^ Mustn't know Robot Chicken a tv show, by Seth Green :P.

^ Known as Jared. (Oh and Valour, it is so much worth pain and I know Twit will exprience I hope to be on the day she does :P)

^ Known for knocking something he's not tried :P (It's worth it :D)

You do way too much telling, and alot of this could be shown. The idea is pretty cliche, I immeadiatly thought of 'The Omen' when I read about the child. ...

^ Known for loving storybooks. (Yep spelled it right :D.)

Hey welcome and hope ya love here as much as I do. So Runescape. Thought most people changed to WoW lmao. Anyway welcome to YWS.

^ Known for counting my things in the profile. (It is though! :D)