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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: You are music

    Hey, thank you guys for commenting. I know it was a bit like a list, but it was really to show the comparison between the various type of music and ...

    Nov 14, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Tingle

    Hey, treehugger and Jas, I am glad you both like it. To jas-- I will consider changing the word "warm" and I will surely revised " eyes rolled back". I ...

    Mar 24, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Storm

    Hey this was indeed beautiful.

    Apr 1, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Love You

    Hey, Ocean_soul, excellent poem! Your rhyming was alright, although the second line in the second stanza seemed crowded. It truly is cute...I mean sweet...no, I mean lovely--Wait, I mean, it ...

    Feb 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Autumnal Night

    I also enjoyed this. It was short and sweet. I liked the slow pace which gave the readers time to absorb it.And the imagery and symbolism were used well. Loved ...

    Feb 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Crashed and I Crumbled

    I also liked your peice, Myrcei. There's a sadness with which any human could relate. I enjoyed it, and besides a few mistakes ,it was indeed well written. Do what ...

    Feb 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Transfusion

    Oops. I meant Timeless.

    Feb 19, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Rigth or Wrong

    Hey, thank you June. What's so crazy is that i saw the mistakes after they were posted. Once again thank you for your comments.

    Feb 19, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Lifeline

    There's a grammatical error in the last paragraph. 'Because 'It's' sink or swim'-correction.

    Jan 30, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Lifeline

    This is Totally Wonderful! 'You're the lifeline I don't need'. Sometimes i feel that way: that i don't need a saviour. The frustration is something to which I can relate. ...

    Jan 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: vice

    I'd really like to get some comments.

    Jan 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Darkness

    Really not bad. i think that a period should have gone at hte end of the first sentence. in the second line you made an error. Correction:'I also heard "They" ...

    Jan 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: His Smile

    Who is this guy? I want to meet this fellow. Wish I had someone to make me feel that way. One thing though this guy also sounds as if you ...

    Jan 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Close Your Eyes and Brace Yourself: Here's Your Last Mistake

    Disgrace washes over the face of a stranger! life stares you down in a family photograph. Oh my god! this is wonderful. You're a great author. it seems that humans ...

    Jan 30, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Blue Jay's Nest

    The begining was really good. I love how one can actually imagine what's going on. Love your use of of visual words.

    Jan 29, 2009


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