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this is quite good, but there are some serious grammar issues, and it gives me a headache to read! Could you possibly put in some spaces? :) I liked the ...

This is so freaky! I like it though. Just a couple of grammatical points, though neither of them are crucial... You said: [quote]'The face once happy and full of life ...

I really like the story, but I agree with J.Haux when she says that the punctuation is important. Still really good, and the scene with Tommy entering into the thieves ...

This is really cool, and I agree with the others, dont add any stunts, it could ruin the whole thing. Keep it simple. PS Please review my story The Shadow ...