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  • Fantasy Novels Re: Part of the Night-Chapter One

    Hi there, I love the characters of this story. Do you read any Tamora Pierce? Your style reminds me of hers a lot. Now, to start at the beginning: I ...

    Dec 15, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Wonder Bread

    Hi there! This was a very touching piece. You've got a knack for descriptive scenes and clever metaphors, which made this an entertaining read. I especially loved the whole "toothpaste ...

    Dec 15, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Knight in the Night

    Hi there! I love the dark tone of this piece, and I'm a sucker for chivalry, so I really enjoyed this poem. A few hopefully helpful remarks: the following stanza ...

    Dec 15, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: An Empty Schoolhouse

    Hi there! This poem is intriguing. I like how you did something unique with the idea of "coloring outside the lines." You turned a cliche into a crisper and sophisticated ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Lyrics Re: Seraphim (We Rise)

    Hi there! I really love all the imagery you use in this piece; it's memorable, and I'm intrigued to here the music behind it. Do you have a recording of ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Candlelit

    Hi there! Thank you so much for the review; I really appreciate it :) I actually purposefully made this piece less passionate and less physically intimate than others I've seen ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Deleted

    Hi there! Can I say, wow? I liked this a lot, and am surprised that no one else has oogled over it yet. Your descriptions are powerful, and the MC ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Cartora (Prologue)

    Hi there! Welcome to YWS! This piece is intriguing. I love the characters; for some reason, I imagine them talking in British accents, and it makes me happy. Anyway, a ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: The OtherWorld Prolouge *Attempt Two*

    Hi there, First off, I love how much detail there is about the OtherWorld and its inhabitants. You've obviously given this a lot of thought, which is awesome. The prologue ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Should I keep writing this?

    Hi there! The answer to your question is yes. Yes you should. You have a knack for detail, and your MC is engaging and fun. I'd love to see where ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Night Driving

    A red Subaru sped down I-40. Its rattling engine echoed over fields of harvested farmland, uninterrupted by other travelers. The road was a lonely place at three in the morning, ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Clementine

    Hi there, First off, I am so impressed with the cleverness of this topic. Your description and the imagery you use to describe this mundane happenstance makes it sparkle, and ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: (no name)

    Hi there, To answer your question, go for it! You could totally write a good poem based off of this encounter/experience/thing. The only part I would change would be the ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: For I Am Unworthy

    Hi there, I really love the cadence of this poem. It flows beautifully from one petition to the next. Also, the theme is vulnerable and soft and I love it. ...

    Dec 14, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Early Sunset

    Hi there! First off, I'd like to say that I love the tone of this piece. It's dark and thoughtful, just like the twilight it describes. Also, the images in ...

    Dec 14, 2010


It's easier to come up with new stories than it is to finish the ones you already have. I think every author would feel that way.
— Stephanie Meyer