elizajoe

here in this illustrous grove grows a silver tree right now a little sapling tender from a seed inside of me and then the winds of change shall whisper wondrous ...

Chapter 1: Into the mystery. Joseph was late. This was unusual. Joseph, for as long as he could remember, always was punctual. Something fishy must be going on. These were ...

I blinked repeatedly but my eyes were still unused to the unusal darkness around me. Take out the unusual. Your eyes are unused to the darkness, so we know its ...

I think its pretty much identical to the beginning of the Sorcerer's stone, with a new character added in. I think it could be a good start, but you'd have ...

This is really good, but I agree with previous comments, its a little too much. Definitely sad, but not even approaching melodramatic. This could turn out really good if you ...

Welcome to Young Writer's Society!! This sounds like a good plot, but you really should write more. All I know is that a locket was stolen. Give some more details ...

This sounds like it could be the beginning of a really good story, but could use some work, especially for description. You describe the archway more, and also the feelings ...