emeraldmaria

Over all, I think it's a great piece. Wonderfully written. I have a few edits that may or may not be personal preference. I think the poem was great, but ...

Hilarious. But I dislike that Death uses the word "Joshing" (though it may be spelled differently). It seems a bit unnatural and too humorous for death. This was funny in ...

To be honest, it was a bit too much dialogue for me. I'm not saying that you need to get the two characters talking less but some when you look ...

Now, I feel stupid for sting this but I'm utterly confused. I get that the girl is a doll but who eats a doll? So all I have established is ...

I think the plot is good. I do agree it is overused, though. Like I used to write a story exatly *stresses the word 'exatly'* like that. I'm not saying ...