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Pardon all the errors in that comment. I haven't been on this site in a long time and I am getting sleepy!

Yes, I started reading it on a whim and I was like "wow, this is a really great lot. I think I may read another chapter! And another, and another...and...another!" ...

This is the only book with so many chapters that I have actually read on this sight. I love it! :)

I agree with what you said about the passage of time being hard to follow.

Okay, I understand the part about the squirrel now :) Maybe describe the cafe a little so the reader understands better? And the grammar is not too distracting, so don't ...

I would read it and I bet many other people would too!

Ever since I joined YWS I have seen your poetry constantly in the spotlight. You are truly an amazing poet and you should become published because I would thoroughly enjoy ...

You described exactly I feel all the time. I like this poem very much and I would review it, but I am pretty awful at poetry, so two thumbs up ...

Cheese?!

I wanna try writing one of there. It's quite an interesting idea and I've never heard of them before. This is a nice try too!!!

Thank you :)

I agree. I would like to review it, but I would have to do it in chunks because it is extremely long

Thank you for the great ideas! :D I'll take some of your suggestions into consideration. I've already begun revising the first chapter and I have actually already written about half ...

Yes!

It's awesome! As I've already stated, heh