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As I lay here on my floor... I can taste your smell, See the darkness and my body engulfed in yours. I can feel your excessive warmth surrounding me, And ...

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WOW I LOVE THIS! at first i thought .. oh how immature, an acrostic poem about love.. but i love the vocabulary you used and how the lines were linked ...

yeah its prose definintely. well sorry, i hate to be mean and critical.. but i really didn't like the way you titled your poem young love.. but then you ripped ...

"Am I just being missed? Are people just not noticing me?" i like the questioning to begin the poem, it sets the scene well. "Is there a place that I ...

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its so beautifully and romantically but then it turnes dark.. i like it. its empowering your character. well done, and beautiful description. needs a tad more zang though.

it sounds like it could more more complex and grammar oh dear! well done though the next one - - can't wait

wow this is sooo good! ooh i know exactly what you mean. try to use capitals at every line break though and it needs a few gramatical corrections but omg ...

The slow, intense sweeping of your lips across mine. Your neck, my tongue. The brushing of your material against my skirt. My fingers twisted in your hair, gripping. Your hands ...

I LOVE THIS its meaningful, but not sort of shove down your throat religious and preacher like. it is sweet, concise, but i definitely like the length of it. no ...

"don't make me build it again?" i totally don't understand this one. whats it metaphorical for? is it metaphorical? i get that its a struggle, but what are you fighting? ...

And so the lion fell in love with the lamb. Like a bird to the sky, Like a moth to the flame, Irresistible, unconditional, irrevocable. The dangerous depth and complexity ...