emmylou1995

I agree with everyone else, your poem is missing something. I cannot tell what but it needs more. I liked most of the imagery though, even though I dislike the ...

It was okay. For some of it I was really confused. It just didnt make sense, other parts I really liked. As Elinor suggested, lighten up on the repitition in ...

I liked it. Interesting idea. Okay, I think you use the word yet too much. Try using some other word. Also, while I was reading it, there seemed to be ...

Okay, I think there is alot more you can do to this poem. Add more detail. Describe the person, the jail. I also was not clear on what is going ...

I loved this! It really doesn't describe anything, and yet I am dying to know more. It would be a great prologue! PM me if you write any more!

Could you review these two things for me please? I can give you a review in return if you PM me. Thanks! Prologue- First Chapter-

Hi, Evi. Would you please reveiw the prologue and first chapter of my book? I really want to know if they are good. Links: Prologue- First chapter- Thanks alot! If ...

Could you review my prologue and first chapter for my book? Its called Diamond Fire. Links- Prologue: First chapter:

Chapter One The small room is filled with many clothes, costumes, hats, and jewelry. In one corner sits a bureau with make-up scattered on it. Different sized shoes littered the ...

Thanks, flower-child! I love writing poems. I am thinking of posting another one soon, so be on the lookout!

I think you could use a better word than boomed. Echoed maybe? 5/10 Heres mine: The small room is filled with many clothes and costumes.

4/10. It just doesnt sound interesting. Story Takes place in a world called Ronaria. Kala loses her mother, seven years in the past from when the story takes place. Kala ...

I like it! I will admit it is not my favorite poem ever. Heres why. All you do in the poem is tell us the relationship, tell us the girls ...

I absolutly, posotivly loved the colors! I loved the heart and the colors and the shapes amd everything else about it! It reminds me of the days when I used ...

I totally agree with Kaedee. I love the right eye. It just has so much personality! The main problems I have with this drawings are the same as hers. Though, ...