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Okay. Because you kissed my ass so nicely, I'll review this. :) But it's going to be tough love. Also, I'm going to assume you gave me permission to rip ...

You seemed to have skipped developing a realistic story and strong characters, and gone straight to preaching to us instead. It's obvious the whole purpose of this story was to ...

This was short and sweet and uncomplicated-I loved it. I wasn't sure what era it was set in-sometime in the first half of the last century? But that doesn't matter ...

This was a good start to a story-I haven't looked at Chapters Two and One yet. I liked the descriptions of the land and the people, and the way the ...

(Sorry if this review sounds like I'm telling you what to write... That's just how I review, I think about how I would write the story and go from there. ...

Firstly, I thought this seemed a little rambly. I know that was the effect you were going for, but cut out some of the ellipses. In a lot of places ...

Thank you so much for this! Never again will I have to suffer the humiliation of being the sophisticated and popular party guest! On a more serious note... this was ...

MeanMrMustard-Yes, the internet is here to bring people together, and that includes debating with people you may have never met. That said, there's a difference between 'debating' and saying "This ...

Okay, firstly I liked the dream part better than the rest. (Actually I loved the dream part.) But the second part had too much explanation about things that could be ...

This isn't a review, more like a big "Oh. Em. GEE!" that I kinda had to share with you. I think I'll print this poem out and stick it in ...

I don't usually like these kinda things, but this was kinda funny! (That may have had something to do with the fact that you had a Hobbit for an avatar. ...

If you're talking about just graphic sex scenes, I totally agree... for young fiction books anyway. If the sex is, um, not so graphic, I'd be a hypocrite if I ...

Oh. My. God. I went to read this feeling all, um, 'critiquey', and ended up collapsing over the computer screen clutching my sides (ie: pissing myself laughing.) This was great! ...

I had a few problems with this: Is this what death feels like? Kerenza had thought it happier, or more carefree. But she knew she wasn’t dead. So, does she ...

Short review: Beautiful imagery, but I didn't really like this bit: Just Bring me to my home, Oh someone, bring me home. Not sure how you could improve it, just ...