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I really liked that. I don't think you should change anything.

It seemed to end really abruptly, like it was going to go on and flourish into this really musical poem, but then it didn't.

The rhyming made the poem stretch a little, but it was okay besides that.

I don't know if it's just me, but sometimes I skimmed over the words because they were a bit too much. Still, it was really good, very descriptive.

Oh. Whoops. It should be HTML. I have no clue what that (or URL) stands for, truthfully. Heh. But it's the junk behind websites and stuff, like underlining and stuff. ...

Gahhhhhhhhh. You're still awesome at poetry! You must give me some of your talent!!!

This was really good. It flowed well and was written well (except for the one spelling mistake).

I am trying to help. Yes, writing is about emotion. But this person chose to post their writings up online. I can't help saying how I feel about the poem.

Don't find this too freaky... but I really like your work. Oh what an honor to speak to you! :)

I know it's only the first chapter, but I'm very confused. Maybe I'm just restless right now, but the descriptions kind of bored me and confused me more.

I can feel the anger but it's more because I know the situation, not because of the words and flow.

This was really good... hey, I might be slow, but are you Liz_funk? Because you write like her.

"I'd rather die of adoration so hot than your touch so cold." That confused me. I don't know why.

I'm trying to critique this but I can't find any part that's worth changing (to me anyway). But it's not about me, so all I can say is I really ...

The descriptions were rather short. You would start off with what seems like a good descriptions but you wouldn't go on with it. Your last sentence doesn't conclude the whole ...