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  • Poetry » General, Health Re: They Don't Speak For Us

    Hello, bookishminecrafter! Artemis here for a shiny new review three days before Christmas! :D First Off: I loved your title. It's just great for a poem like this one. Keep ...

    Dec 22, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Fear

    Hey, Artemis28 for a review four days before Christmas! :D I want to talk about your lack of punctuation. In this whole poem, you have exactly three period. Sometimes, it's ...

    Dec 21, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Alone for Christmas

    Hello, ElvenJedi! Artemis here for a shiny review five days before Christmas! :D First, I want to talk about the rhyme scheme. For most of the poem, you find words ...

    Dec 20, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Guardians of Lyran: Chapter one

    Heiyo, AlexOfLight! I'm getting a very Ga'Hoolish vibe from this piece. The name gives it away--Guardians of Lyra? A lot like Guardians of Ga'Hoole, don't you think? :D My first ...

    Dec 20, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Half A Sandwich

    Welcome to YWS, simplesu! I'm Artemis28 for a review. :) First, I'm going to talk about grammatical things. In one line you have "isn't not". I'm guessing you only meant ...

    Dec 11, 2016
  • Script » Dramatic, Culture Re: Tall Tails

    Heya, Zelda! You may not know me, but I'm in the Warriors Club here on this site. I've seen some of your posts. :D There are typos in this piece, ...

    Dec 2, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Journey of Acceptance:Hope- Prologue

    Heiyo, occymay! Artemis28 from Fantastic Beasts on this fine Review Day! :D What drew me in was the title, so you can pride yourself on that. The Journey of Acceptance ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Correlations - 1 - Pandora's Trap

    Heiyo, plaguewritings! I'm here from Fantastic Beasts for an amazing Review Day. :D I'll jump right in. I liked your beginning, what with the characters and the warbird and all. ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Romantic Re: Exposition.

    Hello, Bailey! I'm Artemis28 for a review. Happy Review Day! :D Let's start at the very beginning. I noticed something right away--you repeat great (twice), and I feel like there ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Storm of Life

    Heya, milabales11! I'm Artemis28 and I'm here to review. Welcome to YWS, by the way! :D The first thing that struck me was the format. I would think it'd be ...

    Nov 25, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Olives and Doves

    Hello, Ejay! I'm Artemis28 for a review of your poem. :) Grammar: I noticed that you used quite a lot of periods. Lots of your lines ended with that, even ...

    Nov 25, 2016
  • Poetry » Science Fiction, Spiritual Re: Astronaut

    Hola, EverySecond! Artemis wants to give some reviews today, so you've got the pleasure of receiving one. :) Now, we might as well start. The second stanza is quite contradictory, ...

    Nov 24, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Spooky Romance - 1

    Hey, Eros! It's Artemis. We've met before. :D I take no offense if you don't remember me. With this piece, you did a pretty good job. There are some grammatical ...

    Nov 6, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: In the Dust

    Heya, Rememberance! My name is Artemis28. Nice to meet you. :D Let's start, shall we? The idea of your poem was fine. The ending was really nice, and I love ...

    Nov 5, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Whomerlock: A Fanfiction

    HEYYYYY Dracula! Artemis on the site for the Spoopy Skeleton team. :D I pretty much know nothing about Sherlock Holmes or Doctor Who, but I'm trying my best to keep ...

    Oct 30, 2016


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