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Re: Lowering the Coffin
Okay, I like the idea of your piece but I think it would be a little better if you polished it. First off, you use and f-bomb and should rate ...
May 27, 2012 -
Re: What's Mine
Oh, I really like this! Your rhyme scheme is perfect, it accentuates the feel of the poem. I just love when people use rhymes right. :) I really like how ...
May 27, 2012 -
Re: The Pajama Man -- Part 1/3
This is really interesting! I can't wait until you post the next part. Just two things I noticed. In the following sentence you spelled "pajama" wrong. "This pyjama guy, whoever ...
May 26, 2012 -
Re: WW, 1st Poem Ever - A Creak in the Night
Well, first of all, I really like your poem. It's very suspenseful. I think the rhyme scheme is a little distracting, honestly. It gets in the way of what you ...
May 25, 2012 -
Re: Creekside Thoughts: A Collection of Poetry
Hello! Welcome to YWS. :) I really like the idea for your poem, it's very pretty, but I think you could benefit from some slightly more diverse word choice and ...
May 25, 2012