fading-dream

I agree with everyone above me. To me, it almost seemed more like a list of actions taken than an actual story. There was no emotion written into the story, ...

Okay, first a few nitpicks. The fourth "Stanza" (there are no breaks, so they are also like sentences) has four lines while the rest remain with three. Secondly, the grass, ...

Hello. So, I thought this poem was alright, but needs a bit of work. First off, the third and fourth stanza don't follow the same rhythm as the other ones. ...

All I have to say is "WOW". That is perhaps the best short story I have ever read. At first, I thought it looked lengthy and was sure I would ...

At first, I was very judgmental about how short this poem was, but in the end, I was convinced this worked well for you. At first I thought this was ...

I absolutely hated this. I'm sorry, the dialog is absolutely terrible. Plus, I think the whole child molestation thing is completely inappropriate, no matter what age you are. I also ...

That was really intense. I loved every bit of it, though I don't get why she didn't lock the bathroom door. Also, maybe because of where I live, I am ...

The others have pointed out most of the grammatical nit-picks I had with this story. So, I will just be reviewing the story as a whole. The first paragraph intrigued ...

This didn't work for me. There was absolutely no picture painted in my head. I actually have trouble telling what this is about but that might be just me. The ...

It was alright, though I don't particularity like the changing of the spelling of the name. Maybe it was added for pronunciation but it just didn't fit. I thought the ...

Hello there! I'll start by saying the same thing the others said: The beginning just isn't working. Once you get to the actual story, it's pretty good. You have set ...

I very much enjoyed this and think that it could go somewhere very new and original... Or very cliched'. I would, however, like to have more detail near the end ...

Okay, so here is my review. The piece is pretty good. I liked the way you told about her emotions. One thing that annoys me is that so many sentences ...

The gentleman gave his name as "Mr. Gray." I admitted him and hustled him into my office. "Just sit here, Mr. Gray." This is worded awkwardly. Maybe break it into ...

This is the first I'm reading of these. It was alright, but could definitely be done better. I took the liberty of reading how the first one started and it ...