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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Storm

    Wow, great poem! It's got such lovely language and a sense of rhythm even though it doesn't really have a rhythm... If you know what I mean... and then it's ...

    Oct 9, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: :: Rain ::

    First off, amazing , you've managed to write a sonnet which rhymes and has the right number of syllables! We did them in English recently and I can tell you ...

    Oct 6, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Shrive: Prologue

    I agree with Prokaryote, the opening isn't as good as the rest. It needs something attention-grabbing. This sounds like a great story, though! I want to find out what happens. ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Missadventures: The circumstances of the missing ghosts.

    Brilliant! I love this! Wow! Do forgive me, I'm a goth at heart. Yes, I think this is great and I can't wait to read more. I really love the ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Red

    Wow! A very interesting style, I can see how you won. It's very difficult to pick up on it, but my main comments would be: maybe split it up into ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: I Don't Need You

    It's kind of hard to 'hear' it without a tune, but the words are definitely strong and speak truthfully - there's definitely emotion there. Minor things I'd pick up on: ...

    Oct 3, 2009
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Hidden Truths

    Well, there are already about 5 reviews based on the storytelling side to this, so I might as well give you some feedback on the historical side. I think it's ...

    Oct 3, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Silver Light Theory

    A funny moral! Apart from a couple of grammatical errors and some spelling issues, I think my main comments would be: 1. The first paragraph - you have several hyphens ...

    Oct 3, 2009


The strongest people are not those who show their true strength in front of us but those who win battles we know nothing about.
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