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this whole thing was one big info dump. i can't say i liked it very much. one mistake i found... So I told her I was fine and that my ...

i really liked this. at first i didn't get it, but then i realised it was just a dream :D the pictures the words formed in my mind were spectacular. ...

hi! this really grabbed me, good work. great imagry at the start. one problem; The years she spent lieing i think that's meant to be lying awake really nice peice ...

the shortness of the lines makes the poem kind of hard and annoying to read because they're so choppy, maybe you could lengthen them up a bit. but thats just ...

finally someone else who thinks like me! This was a wonderfully written poem with a very good train of thought. i will look out for more of your posts :)

gday. For your 1st poem i think the rhyme sounds a bit forced, remember that poems don't always have to rhyme. It has good rhythm though. The second poem however ...

Death of the Titans -Richard “Eh? What’s that?” I asked, getting out of my bed. “Get out of bed, you lazy bum. There’s a visitor at the door. this should ...

I'm scared. Are you going to kill me? This prologue made me curious, it made me want to read more, so i guess it did its job. However it was ...

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wow. that was the best poem i've ever read - no jokes. I'm serious, you have real talent. it was full of emotion and descrpition and flowed so well. it ...

i have no idea what i'm doing here... good: the scarecrow scared crows. bad: it also scared me. worse: it was that thing off that movie "jeepers creepers" and it ...

i completely agree with sophiesays

wow. i'm... speachless. I'm in awe. I'm jealous of ur serious talent. wow

thanks for your advice i will edit the poem when i have the time :D

Hi. Everyone else has beat me to pointing out your errors but nobody else has mentioned that this is a little short to be a chapter and i didn't really ...