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Re: Life's A Process
I liked this story, though I would have loved a scene of the two of them together when everything was happy. What were they like together? How did they express ...
Feb 6, 2012 -
Re: The Golden Arches of Oxford Street
Good poem. Contrast of the first two paragraphs with the third is nice. The third paragraph is my favorite. 'Hovering chair vultures', I count myself among them! Overall, a good ...
Feb 5, 2012 -
Re: Falling Flame
Noooo! That's so sad! I thought the use of first person was really good. Referring to the boy as you instead of by name was a good idea. I don't ...
Feb 4, 2012 -
Re: What to be?
Good opening to the story: “What do you want to be when you’re older, Sarah?” The teacher asked. “I want to be an actress,” she replied. After one person, everyone ...
Feb 2, 2012