fireheartedkaratepup

Gaaahhhh, I loved this. It captures the emotion of poets everywhere so perfectly, and describes us so well. I would like to say so many more things, but this is ...

Gah. These are all so good that the nitpicks I had flew out of my head. I can't think. I'll come back tomorrow.

GAAAAHHH, you're just too good. In the first poem, I think you need to change some of the punctuation: Fingers clenched tight across links, oxidized iron bloodying her hands a ...

Mmmm, you over-describe. For instance, the sentence about the size of the t-rex's eyes. Maybe you could be more.... what's the word..... illustrative? Like..... "Slowly, the T-rex opened his large, ...

Ok, first: You need to space your work. I cannot stress this enough. I'm tired now. My eyes can't follow this very well. What you need to do is start ...

Yeah, you do have typos. One thing about songfics: I'm not sure how they do them on YWS, but I'm used to seeing the lyrics in italics, single-spaced. It doesn't ...

I had a critique-- start a new line at the or on line two, take away the period because the last sentence (of the first stanza) seems like a fragment-- ...

Ok, I wanna read your story now. (I didn't before, because I don't like reading novels online. So good job.) I can relate to the character--ok, so I don't have ...

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. :( (When I think of the circus, I always think of the first Robin now. XD) This was really good. I like the way you describe things. When underneath ...

Huh? HAHA! That's great. Interesting idea. Watch out for fragments and too many commas--the person above pointed out the same things I was going too. :p ....I want to say ...

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO I hate death stories. D: You use a lot of fragmented sentences, especially in the first paragraph. Try stinging things together with commas, hyphens, colons, and semi-colo

XD You know what the word for this sort of thing is, right? That's right. Crack. (I happen to kinda like crack, so you're good.) Not a fan of scripts, ...

General impression: Huh? I don't agree with the people above me--I think in what you have here, big words are important. Even though I don't really understand this as a ...

I'm sorry, but......I really don't want to read another vampire vic. :P Nevertheless, I'll give you my impression before I realized that: It's pretty good, but it needs some work. ...

How very Poe-etic of you. (Incredibly lame pun, I know.) i like your style here--in fact, that's one thing I like about Poe's work, though the content of his stories ...