fireheartedkaratepup

Yo Scratch! Too bad you're not on my team this time. “Hey Gumbo.,” There should only be one punctuation mark here. I would go with the period, since you're not ...

Your smile's so sweet Making this day feel complete This is good, but try not to fall into the trap of choosing words simply because they rhyme. I bring this ...

Yo. I'm tired. Yay. *cough* Anyway. You should not--and I want to emphasize this--put the setting in italics the way you have done. Either use one (or more, whatever) sentence(s) ...

Ok, I hate you. This is way too long. This is rather awesome. I will tell you right now that I am not familiar with this character, and I do ...

So I thought I was the second reviewer. XP My bad. Overall, this is good. I like how you used the same phrase with different wording; it makes the reader/listener ...

Mornin'. This is goodbye to all of the weight that I heap on myself Typo. Easy to miss. This is goodbye to beating myself up when things go wrong It's ...

Hokay. Since this is you, you'll be wanting an in-depth review. I'll try my best, but.... let's just say I'm no Mustard. I seem to better at the emotions and ...

EHTE *glomps* Sentence one: OHHAY, RUN-ON! :O Here's my re-write: I need a key, because I'm lame: Blue =take out Red =add in (Parentheses)=you could add this, but I'm not ...

Aww, this was so sweet! It has a powerful message. It is kinda preachy, though--remember that storytelling is a journey, not a destination. This can be really, really hard--I'm still ...

OH MY ADLAJDFL;ADJL;FJAL;JDFL;JADL;FJL;AJDL;FJLA;DJFL;JASL;DJFL;AJSDL;FJADL;JFL;AJDLFJAWEJFLKJASLCVJAOJEL;J ANOTHER SEER IN DA HIZZOUSE!! *cough* You should ALWAYS, always always always always write y

Mustard seems to have something against first person...... o.o ;3 I love this! It's wonderful. I wish I had nitpicks, but I don't--you captured the sort-of desperation of the artist ...

I know, I'm a terrible person. HECKNAW. I'm taking an internship--Monday thru Wednesday, I'm at a house of prayer all day attending classes that are like church, only we hafta ...

Hahaha, this was quite amusing, especially since I'm not a Bruno Mars fan. (Not sure what it is aboutthe dude, exactly, it's just.... I dunno. I don't like him.) I ...

Awww. I really feel for the speaker in this song. You did well with putting a lot of emotion into your writing--and with lampshade as a prompt--! Fantastic job. I'm ...

I like thought processes. I don't like the books I had to read for my worldviews class. This read like one of those. I'm torn. I'll stop using too many ...