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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: The Dive-Chapters 7-8

    I really like this! I think you have a really interesting plot, and you could make it even more awesome by really trying to put your readers in the shoes ...

    Jul 6, 2016
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: 3½ years

    I absolutely loveee this poem! I like how it's structured like a stream of consciousness and the flow is just so natural, like you could lose yourself in it. I ...

    Jul 6, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Dramatic Re: Outlaw - Part Three

    Hi, I really like this and I think it has some awesome moments! I really like the line when you say "nodded like I was being paid to," and I ...

    Jul 6, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Forbidden: Prologue

    This prologue is so interesting! You definitely leave me wanting to know more about the narrator's world. Just a few grammar things I noticed: maybe change it to "Here, the ...

    Jul 3, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Spiritual Re: look into my eyes

    This poem is gorgeous! I can't get over the "touching you, I feel the conglomerate..." line. I'm just a little confused on the the "hurting you is hurting me," so ...

    Jul 2, 2016
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Literature Re: we leaves

    This poem is so beautiful, even in its sadness. I think it's very well done and circles back nicely to the idea of light from beginning to end. If you ...

    Jul 2, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Fantasy Re: Days.

    I think this poem is really beautiful! Maybe add a question mark after "soul" since you're asking a question. I like your line "when the ugly are beautiful," and maybe ...

    Jul 2, 2016
  • Other » General, General Re: Roller Coaster

    Hi, I really like this poem and I think it has a lot of potential! I think you should try to incorporate more showing your emotions and not telling us ...

    Jun 18, 2016


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