flowerchild

WOW! You were really descriptive and you really made people want to read it with your beginning. The way you ended the peom was very intresting to.

Half the sun shown on the horizon Dust and sand settled as did the sun Darkness will soon come And the light soon will go Colors are shining until moonbeams ...

That was really good! It was intriguing. You should write more.

Very good but specify what is happening to certian people and decide if you're going to use names or not.