forever.always

I could tell by the way she was standing that she didn’t want to be here. It’ll all be over soon, I told myself. She’ll be gone in less than ...

For a fifth-grader this is pretty awesome if you ask me! =)

I like the plot of your story, it's very nice. I think the characters of your story are well described as well. I have a few comments: “That makes absolutely ...

It was Brian’s eyes that Abby liked most. They were dark brown in color, chocolate brown, she liked to think; a rich, creamy chocolate brown. Whenever his gaze feel on ...

Great job! I have a few comments: You know that feeling that sometimes you have when you receive bad news. (Try adding a question mark at the end of this ...

I really like this. The part about the "sculpted" hands was well described, I liked it. However, I agree with MiriamHannah; I thought the end could be altered slightly. [/quote]Strap ...

Wow, this is amazing. The way you began your story was absolutely astounding. I was totally not prepared for it. =) This is really good.

I know that I started a lot of sentences with "I" but I did it on purpose.

Ok, so after reading some of the comments posted, I thought I should probably explain myself. :D This story is actually true, but I didn't post it as Non-Fiction because ...

whoa, some people are so intensely thorough in reviewing! haha, that's cool anyways, looooooooove the story yaayyy! I gave it a gold star ahaha!

I thought the title of this poem was really creative! great job. Overall, I thought this was a very nice piece. =) However, I thought there could be a few ...

This is very nice! I liked your choice of words and adjectives; I could definitely imagine the scenery. I think your last stanza is especially significant. It was powerful! :D