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Re: Naked in the City
Exploring the woods was one of our favorite hobbies; no matter how many times we went exploring out there, we always found something new. The underlined "exploring" sounds a bit ...
Feb 22, 2009 -
Re: Stranded
I handed them over to one of the women, and they began preparing them You need to change that to either "I handed them over to the women, and they ...
Feb 9, 2009 -
Re: Stop and Smell the Roses (New Version!)
I really like this, it kept me hooked the whole time. I want more though. The ending left me hanging a little. I want to see his mother when she ...
Jan 28, 2009 -
Re: Top Secret (Edited)
When we got to my house, we both went inside and sat on my couch. We were silent for a few minutes before I spoke. “Why didn’t you ever tell ...
Jan 28, 2009 -
Re: RG's prompt #3
My parents brought up my little brother to be the least bit of gay. Football since he was 4, adding in soccer at 7, and even karate somewhere along the ...
Jan 28, 2009 -
Re: I Made a fool of myself, again.
Positive: You were really real and blunt with what was going on instead of beating around the bush. Alot of writers struggle with that. It was funny, partly because my ...
Jan 27, 2009 -
Re: Unzipped; III
I like it, it really shows what goes through a girl's mind when she hasn't done anything like that before. I would've liked to see how she evaded her parents ...
Jan 27, 2009 -
Re: Breaking Dawn Parody
Okay so this is probably the most hilarious parody I've ever seen. I like how you made fun of meyer without being outright mean, it made my day :D I ...
Jan 27, 2009 -
Re: The Day All the Roses Died
I really like this! You showed what really is happening to our environment, and how we should take better care of it. It takes a good writer to put real ...
Jan 27, 2009 -
Re: Just What I need.
One. Hot, humid, summer air seeped through my window as I awoke from a busy day’s sleep. I forgot to shut the window, again. Thankfully I slept with my door ...
Jan 27, 2009 -
Re: Twilight Fanfiction: The Wedding
So this was a decent fanfic, the only things I can see wrong with it are that you didn't keep bella's personality the same, it's obvious in the books that ...
Jan 25, 2009 -
Re: Werewolves, the Volturi, and sweet temptation.
I love the irony! :D Great job, I would elaborate more on their past though if I were you.
Jan 25, 2009 -
Re: Werewolves, the Volturi, and sweet temptation.
I love the irony! :D Great job, I would elaborate more on their past though if I were you.
Jan 25, 2009 -
Re: First Kiss, edit
The way you had the dream end had me rolling it was hilarious. But I wanna know who the guy was :]
Jan 23, 2009
