forgiving.is.easy

Exploring the woods was one of our favorite hobbies; no matter how many times we went exploring out there, we always found something new. The underlined "exploring" sounds a bit ...

I handed them over to one of the women, and they began preparing them You need to change that to either "I handed them over to the women, and they ...

I really like this, it kept me hooked the whole time. I want more though. The ending left me hanging a little. I want to see his mother when she ...

When we got to my house, we both went inside and sat on my couch. We were silent for a few minutes before I spoke. “Why didn’t you ever tell ...

Positive: You were really real and blunt with what was going on instead of beating around the bush. Alot of writers struggle with that. It was funny, partly because my ...

I like it, it really shows what goes through a girl's mind when she hasn't done anything like that before. I would've liked to see how she evaded her parents ...

Okay so this is probably the most hilarious parody I've ever seen. I like how you made fun of meyer without being outright mean, it made my day :D I ...

I really like this! You showed what really is happening to our environment, and how we should take better care of it. It takes a good writer to put real ...

So this was a decent fanfic, the only things I can see wrong with it are that you didn't keep bella's personality the same, it's obvious in the books that ...