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Ah, that makes a lot more sense. Keep up the good work :)

Yikes sorry for the duplicate reviews.

FIRST- 2 notes that aren't really review related but just random thoughts: 1. I love the title- "this too shall pass" is a sort of personal motto of mine. 2. ...

No problem, I just want to reiterate- I enjoyed your poem! The topic is cool and I'm a sucker for really short lines.

I like the message of the poem- the simple story that it tells, but I don't feel as if the poem has any flow or rythmn. I understand that its ...

Thanks for the reviews guys!

Thanks to both of you for your reviews- the advice is appreciated!

Thanks!

Thank you for the compliments and suggestions, I'll take them in account.

I'm glad my comments were helpful. :) Okay, for showing emotions, you could describe his emotions by showing how he physically reacts or what he says ("tears welled up in ...

I enjoyed reading this piece of the chapter- it definitely caught my interest. Okay. I think your writing is pretty good, but you have to be careful about specifying things. ...

First of all, the last two sentences are are awesome. They gave me chills. The king's PoV in the beginning, the flashbacks are a bit unwieldy, try to make them ...

It's from my NaNoWri, so I wrote this before I got frantic. :)

I really like this, but watch out, you have a couple grammar mistakes and have left out a few words here and there. One of my favorite parts were your ...