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Ishmael. Its about a monkey (that talks) that tells the world how mankind is viewed from another perspective (Stranger in a Strange Land??) a whole bunch of philosophical fluff, basically.

I've never read a vamp. piece like this, with them integrated into society. I was hooked. The only thing I'd say is that I kind of wish I had a ...

I like how you eased into the scene with so much descriptiveness, and the beginning and end tie the thing together well. I would also say the main mistake was ...