gurockian

the story line was exellent the only thing i can find wrong was the numerous typos and you could explain the back round a little more, write on :D

the story was good and it had a alice in wonderland feel and the only thing was the story was a little hard to follow so can you clear it ...

there is no other way to say it the story was geinus, the only way i think you could improve it is give a little more backround information, but please ...

this story definatly caught my intrest and i hope you will continue and to improve it tell more about where the story is taking place

i think the story was a little to short and i wish you could've given more backround information because i didn't understand what was going on. i hope you continue ...

the story defiatly scared me strait i definatly wouldn't want to read this at night, but if you described the man a little more it would be even scareier

i think you should talk more about the dog because i didn't get a picture in my head, so could you expand on that? other than that the story was ...

the story was great, but i would like to see more detail of what the con man did.