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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Reaper's Heart

    I never really got the whole "critiquing writers" thing because, well, isn't it what the words mean that count, not the grammar? Anyways, your poem moved me! There were a ...

    Apr 17, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Diary Of A Tenage Disaster 2

    I'm always too late for corrections. This story is really well-written! I feel like I'm this girl, freaking about stupid hair (like most girls do). But, one question. What's a ...

    Apr 17, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Diary Of A Teenage Disaster 1

    Well, I won't really say anything anyone else hasn't already said.... But yeah, I thought this story was funny and cute. I liked how the narrator was over dramatic about ...

    Apr 17, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: There's This Girl

    Hello. First off, I just wanted to say that I love this story! I like the way the narrartor interacts with the audience. I love the main character. I see ...

    Apr 12, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Other Realm, Chapter One. *Revised*

    Wow, as the other two said. Too many characters at once! Try intoducing one chacter, have a scene with them, then intoduce the other in another scene. Otherwise, it looks ...

    Apr 12, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Fade Away

    that was good! the only thing i would have to say really is the part that goes "Plenty of fish in some sea" i think you should change "some" to ...

    Apr 12, 2009


The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.
— Richard Price