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  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Burning chatper 2

    Are your chapters going to get longer? I think you could've put a bit of chapt. 3 in this because it's quite short :). Also, you got some mistakes as ...

    May 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: This Monster

    I really liked it! :D You're a great poet, my friend. :D I LOVE YA!

    May 29, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Broken: Chapter 1: A friend, an ally, a lover?

    I'm pretty confused. I liked it, I really did :). But is Michael her ex-husband? It doesn't mention his name at all in the first part so how did he ...

    May 29, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Love Lost

    I liked it :). The idea should have been made a story! I didn't really get it though, this short section I mean. I read the spoiler after I read ...

    May 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: What is it?

    This seems more like a song than a poem. It repeats a lot and in many poems it can work but this poem is to short for repeats :). I ...

    May 28, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Exposed Secrets: Chapter One

    I''m kind of confused... I really don't know what's going on and I reread it a few times. I'm guessing this isn't a normal type of story, will you make ...

    May 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: [deleted]

    This is great! :) But I'd suggest lining the sentences out, ya know, to make it more flowy :D. Lol, it would be neat and gorgeous! You're very good :)

    May 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Ashen

    I love how your story starts out! But to much info at once!! It's annoying! :P Other than that, try and be more descriptive :) you can describe all this ...

    May 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Ashen Chapter 2

    Hey Tay! Best cousin ever :) anyway, a lot of times, people on this website use the enter key for dialog so it won't seem so clogged up. Also, the ...

    May 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Boy

    It's okay, I don't get the title but maybe that's just me. I liked your good vocabulary; however, the words didn't really make sense to me. I don't understand this ...

    May 24, 2011
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re:

    I really enjoyed this! I found not at all one flaw (only because I was concentrating on the story). It's very good and I thought it was extremely descriptive! It ...

    May 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Your Embrace

    I absolutely adored this!! It feels amazing to know that one person is out there for all of us. I think it's a habit for girls to think they're not ...

    May 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Cupid

    I like it! :) However, take out some of the words such as yet and now because it messes up the rhyming... Other than that it was pretty good :).

    May 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Roses and Poetry

    I like it! It is unique and beautiful :) I usually do not prefer happy and flowery poetry but this poem made me smile. :) Great job! Thank you! Good ...

    May 21, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Saved by him

    Hey! I'm here to review. To tell you the truth I thought it was way to short and unorganized. I became kind of bored also. You need to describe what ...

    May 21, 2011


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