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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hope

    DUDE. WOW. Haha, I think you've probably summed up hope in a great little stanza. I mean. Yeah. If life turns gloomy, sad and dark; just keep hope to light ...

    Jun 19, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Rich and Ugly World

    Wha.... umm... I'm speechless? The emotion portrayed in this is crazy! I absolutely LOVED it! I don't really think this could be counted as a review, but I'll try to ...

    Jun 19, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Will

    I have oooonnnnee nitpick:) The old games sitting unused in my room, so you can play them like you never did with me, because you were always to tired from ...

    Jun 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Once Dead, Now Alive.

    Hey, Taco. Great poem, but you've got some rustiness still in there. It's a little... choppy. :) Once I was dead -- Now I'm Alive. I once was Sad. Now ...

    Jun 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Colors

    EPIC! :) I love it. The rhythm was good, it sounded like you were reading it to me as I was drifting off to sleep. A nursery rhyme, only without ...

    Jun 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Shining Sun

    Hey! I liked this. Your rhythm was great and the sense of mystery was just kind of THERE. I definitely thought you had real imagery. Spots I liked: the shining ...

    Jun 5, 2010
  • Script » General, General Re: Eradication (Scene Three)

    Oh wow. This sounds like a really good movie!! When it does come out, feel free to tell me:) Now I'm no expert at scripts, so I'll just say this: ...

    May 28, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Needle and Thread

    Hey! I love it! I have one nitpick. Take away my dread Take away my sorrow Take away my pain Take away my knowledge Here, it becomes redundant. So, instead ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Another Fight?

    ehh.. I think I should tell the truth. I didn't like this much. The idea's great, but the writing's gone astray. Not all poetry has to rhyme. You either do, ...

    May 22, 2010
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: The Best Book Ever Read

    I've actually thought about this a lot. I've decided that it's The Book Thief by Markus Zusak. It has everything for me: great characters, an interesting plot that doesn't rely ...

    May 12, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: A Conversation

    Hey hey! One nitpick: ...trying to maneuver past a semi with an add for Walgreens on it. that needs to be 'ad' Okay! that's all. :) Loved loved loved the ...

    May 2, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: ----------

    SO CUTE! IT MADE ME CRY. I don't have anything to say, other than this really got to me and I love the way it was written. I hope you ...

    Apr 14, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Never Knew

    OMG! *Noms* This is good. I like the concept. good job. until I stepped into them. This doesn't sound right. I would say something more like, "until I marched in ...

    Apr 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Why?

    I must say... this is good :) I don't have anything to ask or critique you on as you have already done everything possible to it. I love the piece ...

    Apr 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Mask

    Too redundant. Sorry, but that's all I really have to say. To make the repetition work, you need more description, more emphasis on everything. Make me HURT like she does. ...

    Apr 9, 2010


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