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it isn't actually supposed to be a rhyming poem and any rhyme done was not supposed to have an effect at all, but thanks anyway :) also the lack of ...

I really don't think that you should make it more obvious that its a guy or mention his name. I think its obvious to the people who are actually paying ...

hey, I'm a little out of practice so please be brutal :) I clench my fists Tight, As you whisper my new name ‘Bitch’ It was just one night I ...

I'm not going to lie, i got a bit lost in that poem. The title doesn't give much away (which is fine) but neither did the actual poem so i'm ...

Ummmm, that whole 'i love you very much' was not obvious at all, took me awhile to find it haha. Anyway, back to the poem. I really loved it. It ...

hey, i really liked the theme of this poem, i think its really rather sweet. But i do agree with the other two critiques, the rhyming and flow of it ...

A feeling I cannot replace Is the love I find in the space Of your unbreakable embrace My love. And when life drives us apart, Loneliness enters my heart, A ...

hey, this is a short poem i wrote a few days ago, i was planning on adding to it, but im not quite sure what to do yet, so i ...

I wrote this on a whim, it is very unpolished and any constructive criticism is greatly needed, I just don't know what to correct to make it better, however, i ...

I liked this, it was good, you kept the storyline progressing well and it was well written. I have a few issues though, the last dramatic speech bit didn't really ...

HI!!! ive read all of your chapters so far and am enjoying them greatly. Anyway, a few pointers, the huge chunk of writin in the middle needs to be split ...

right, i'am back. Ok so your poem is really great. really. I loved the last stanza, 9th stanza and 6th stanza best because they flow so well and are worded ...

I loved this so i gave u a star! Enjoy. You told us the story so well. I loved it and to think you are only 13! As your senior ...

Ok so i have a few things to point out. You start with a stanza that doesn't rhyme but then in the next two it does. I think you need ...