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  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: All The Little Butterflies (Chapter 2)

    Hello again! Again, an enjoyable piece. The only thing I would say is that I think you could maybe have some more description throughout? Maybe that wasn't your intention, and ...

    Mar 30, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: All The Little Butterflies (EDITED)

    Hello there! I enjoyed reading this. It was sweet and enjoyable. I heard your idea being called a 'cliche', and I'd just like to say that I don't find it ...

    Mar 30, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Schizophrenia (edited)

    Wow1 This is chilling, creepy, and twisted, with lots of darkness throughout. It's also a brilliantly wrotten piece and you certainly have a way with words here. It seems to ...

    Mar 23, 2009
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Intoxicated Babbling

    Hello! I have to say, to begin, that I throughly enjoyed your piece. Long, but certainly worth it. I like your use of humour throughout. Some of the lines of ...

    Mar 6, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Bite Me teaser

    This seems like a brilliant idea, and one that I will certainly read more of when you post more. Will you pm me when you do post some more? I ...

    Mar 2, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: My First Post

    Hey there! I personally think that your story needs more description of the characters-it helps the reader to imagine them as being real, and helps them to want to find ...

    Feb 26, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Her First Mistake: Part 1

    Hello there!! I'll begin by saying that the fast-paced, action style that you have here is very engaging, and keeps the reader interested, but di try to make sure you ...

    Feb 23, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Daddy, My Wings

    I really love this poem. It's beautiful, emotional and simple. When I say simple, I mean in a good way. It is clear and beautifully comprehensible with lots of genuine ...

    Feb 22, 2009
  • Other » General, General Re: The Meaning of Life

    I loved this! People say that I am too naieve about life, so it's good to know there are other out there who feel the way that I do!! All ...

    Feb 16, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Dark before day

    Hello!! I like your idea, the origina but still sort of classic if that makes sense! The only things I would say on the negative side is that maybe you ...

    Feb 14, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Death's Apprentice Chapter Three: Possibly

    Hello!! Although I love this as I have loved the others, I think you could describe the scene of the accident a lot more. In saying that, however, your use ...

    Feb 13, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Death's Apprentice Chapter Two: Slowly

    Hello again!! Oooh I like it!! Great work again! One little thing (although I accept this could be completely personal) is that it would be great for Life to be ...

    Feb 13, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Death's Apprentice Chapter One: Suddenly

    Hello! This is a brilliant, original idea. However, I think that in some parts you could be a bit more creative-I agree with what was said earlier about the generic ...

    Feb 13, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: "Ballerina" The first Chapter (edited)

    Hello!! I love your plot line-classic! You have quite a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, but I can see that people have already pointed those out! Your characterisation is ...

    Feb 13, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: who in the whispered breeze

    This is such a pretty poem!!! It's lovely. I don't really know the greatest amount about poem structure and that, but I really did like your structure. Your use of ...

    Feb 10, 2009


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