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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: One Last Time

    This poem is really simplistic, however this isn't a bad thing. Some great things come in small packages. Two adjectives to describe this: SHORT and SWEET. For some reason I ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, Teen Fiction Re: Patches

    First off! The structure of your poem is amazing, really enhances the feeling of everything going downhill, falling apart. I love it. Here is it basically. You're a complete stranger ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: This soul of mine so old.

    First off, I'll start with the negatives as there are WAY more positives to highlight afterwords. If this is a poem, i kindly suggest you do it the format of ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: I wish that you knew.

    This poem caught my attention right off the bat. WHY? the title. "I wish you knew*DOT" The dot really got me to look at it, it's really short as if ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Narrative, Teen Fiction Re: Long Sleep

    I really like this poem; I think it has loads of potential. The repetition used is really effective as the feeling of the entire poem really sticks to the reader. ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » General, Teen Fiction Re: Wasted, Broken, Gone

    Hi Bethany Marie Wright!! I really love this poem, it literally brought tears to my eyes. It seems that you have been through quite a bit, don't take this wrongly ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Too Deep

    There are two ways you can think of "her" in this poem; you can either love "her" or hate "her" and that's what I love about this poem. It is ...

    May 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: To See You Leave

    This poem is tragically beautiful. The way in which you have written it makes me want to cry a whole rive. It is a very sad poem and you've achieved ...

    Oct 19, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Like Magic

    First of all, I was captivated by the title and I am a real sucker for romance. Though this is a stereotypical love poem, you've performed very well in terms ...

    Oct 19, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical Re: Oblivious

    This poem is thoroughly amazing. It has something I like to call the 3 S': SHORT, SWEET and SIMPLE. The poem is slightly ambiguous which means the reader can have ...

    Oct 19, 2013
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Falling away

    This short story is amazing. The language is really emotive and it basically put me in tears. That is a real talent, cm57105, if you can do that someone just ...

    Jul 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: The Feeling I Felt

    I really LOVE this poem. The emotion inside it just fills me with familiarity because its exactly how I feel everyday. These types of love are the most complicated ones, ...

    Jul 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Lyrical Re: Butterfly Kisses

    This poem is short and sweet and that's what I like about it. The concept is entirely right, innocence is a like butterfly kisses. The title drew me in towards ...

    Jul 10, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Screaming Silence

    this poem is great and good things come in little packages. I really like the fact that it is not really long, so it kept my interest. The words are ...

    Jul 10, 2013
  • Poetry » Health, Realistic Re: Deception

    This poem is short and sour, but in the best ways. Rather than saying short and sweet, this poem develops the character of a particular person in five lines and ...

    Jun 30, 2013


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