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I don't think it's really that bad. I personally loved your opening sentence and it looks alright to me so far : ) I hope you keep going with this. ...

Hey, I'm Jessica, and welcome to YWS. Corrections Are In Red, by the way! his short brown hair motionless in the wind. I really don't think we need all these ...

Howdy! Tis' Jessica, and I'll be reviewing The Darkness Thickens. I just have a few opinions and nitpicks for you so here goes nothing. Overall, your detail is great as ...

Hi! This is Jessica! 15 minutes left before the start of the classes. Try and always write out your numbers. “Hey”, I said when she saw me. The comma should ...

Aloha! It's Jessica here, and I'm here to review this. First of all, this sounds more like part of a preface than a prolouge. Just wanted to let you know ...

Aloha! Tis' Jessie, the rubber ducky! : D I really like this, I think it has tons of potential and I enjoyed it. It didn't exactly keep my attention the ...

Aloha! Tis' Jessica! And I'm here to review this wonderful piece of yours. By the way, welcome to Young Writers Society! :smt003 "Are you Cassandra Emerson?" the nurse on the ...

Hello! I'm Jessica, here on request : D - First of all, I really thought this was adorable! It made me feel guilty about my animals I have at home, ...

Well, First of all I'd love to say that you are a wonderful writer and I do love your work. It seemed to not flow really nice. The word choice ...

Aww! I'm so sorry! That's a really nice poem. : ) Key Red- Nice, though could have been written a little differently Green- I loved it Note- I'm used to ...

Hi again! It's Jessica here. First of all, again, I loved the idea. There is a theory of the world ending in 2012 and you twisted it up and your ...

Hey again! It's Jessica. "COME ON BILL! Tell me where we're going!" - When somebody speaks, tell us who is speaking. I know there is only two people in the ...

Aloha Libby! It's Jessica! I thought this was really cute, : ) Good job! Having to meet up to certain expectations can you really relate to it?! Going through boyfriend ...

Hi! Well, I'm Jessica and I'll be reviewing this today. First of all, I liked it. I thought it was very mysterious and it sounded pretty cool. - Try and ...

I think your idea was very clever, first of all. Keep writing! Red- Corrections and comments! Indent I layed across the backseat of Jake's car. Our honeymoon had to be ...