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Ah, I see. That%u2019s a pretty creative persona, I%u2019ve never seen anyone do something like that before. I%u2019m a GM too, by the way. It%u2019s always nice to meet someone ...

Thank's for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed my story as much as I enjoyed writing it. Out of curiosity, what is your guild all about? Are you guys a ...

Thanks for the feedback! I think you're right about Kurt's reaction to the man, I'll have to figure out a better thing for him to say. As the confusion at ...

Okay, that makes a little more sense.

Oops, I guess anger was a bit too strong a word there. I was referring to Kurt%u2019s reaction to the man earlier in the story, but I guess that wasn%u2019t ...

Yeah, I've never been great at catching grammar and punctuation errors in my own work. I'm not the most detail oriented person, so maybe I should install a grammar checker ...

I guess I'll have to keep the whole "reality unraveling" thing in mind when I read the next chapters. Is the butterfly zombie part of that too?

Thanks for the analysis of Luke, it's nice to have some insight. You're right about my lack of planning. I'm not sure if I already mentioned this before, but this ...

I'll improve it once I go back to edit. Thanks for the suggestion.

Solitude has an effect too? Should be interesting to see what happens when the characters start meeting up.

Welcome to YWS, by the way. I just realized you were new.

Welcome to YWS, by the way. I just realized you were new.

I certianly don't mind the length. I tend to make mine fairly long too.

I like that idea, but I'll probably tweak the wording to something to the effect of: Her face went hot as panic took over. She had to do something, but ...

I'm certianly glad you enjoyed the overarching plot, even if the style was lacking in parts. This is a very rough draft, and I do plan to go back and ...