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  • Romantic Short Stories Re: My DreamWorld

    I had created my dreamworld one night while laying in bed. I closed my eye and I pictured a lake, a crystal clear lake. Surrounding the lake were oak trees ...

    Nov 7, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Keeper: [2] *edited*

    Hey I really love this, but I am confused. I know she is dating Zack but could you make that more apparent please? I was confused until I re-read it ...

    Nov 7, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Keeper: [1] *edited*

    This is such a great story! You have good detail and the characters are beautifully portrayed! Each time I read this, it gives me more inspiration to write

    Nov 7, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Feeling Unknown (edidited version)

    Hopefully this is a bit better but please critique it as best as you can I watched her through golden eyes as she came into my forest. I was perched ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: The Belgrade Convoy

    I loved it! This was an amazing piece! So well written and portrayed. I could feel the pain and suffering. I could feel all the characters feelings and you did ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Papillon

    This was indeed very interesting. It captured my attention immediately when I saw the Fire and Ice bit. Always am I intrigued when opposites come together and I am interested ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: to learn to fly -- prologue

    This captured my attention immediately. I really loved the beginning but the end is what really effected me. It showed me how the girl felt, maybe bitter and angry. I ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Keeper: [3x2]

    Okay i am not so good at the grammer part so i will leave that to someone else. However I did notice the bit between Levi and Lia. It makes ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Keeper: [3x1] *edited*

    Okay the detail is amazing and you made it very clear what was happening and what was going on in the story. I really enjoy reading about the characters and ...

    Oct 27, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Feeling Unknown

    Kinda new to this, but please I want your opinion! She was in intense pain. She doubled over as it spread through her body. Her heart felt as if it ...

    Oct 23, 2009
  • Romantic Novels Re: Round Like The Moon (1)

    I really loved reading this! this is a great thing to write about. That poor girl regretted something she did along with losing something else! I am so sorry for ...

    Oct 23, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Why not the Gentleman?

    This piece is so amazing! I did find it a bit hard to understand in the beginning but that may be because I am a fast reader. The writing was ...

    Oct 23, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Behind Closed Bloodlines (A Short Story)

    The plot line was extrememly interesting and very good. It was interesting enough to keep me wanting to read more. I enjoyed all the details that you put in to ...

    Oct 23, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: With a Dying Breath (PG-13) (edited)

    I'm new at the whole poetry thing, but I hope you like it Love Lost You shove me away, my back against a wall I have no one to turn ...

    Oct 20, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Keeper: [3x1] *edited*

    I have to say this is one of the coolest things I have ever read. The story is interesting enough to make you want to keep reading. The details are ...

    Oct 20, 2009


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