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kayrose

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Silver Tears Chapter One

    I like the plot a lot. And you broke it into paragraphs, which some people forget to do. In the beginning I think you could add some more detail to ...

    Aug 26, 2011


No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it.
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