kevin25a

No offense taken. :) It was helpful, commas are my weak area of punctuating. This one was written before I started to improve what little bit I have since joining, ...

This was actually the only story I went back to revise at all, and I spent my whole first month working on it. I hadn't noticed some of the things ...

Really? I gave you your first review on here? Your welcome, I'm always willing to give people reviews. You actually joined the day after I did, if you didn't notice.

Well this story sounds really good, I'm looking forward too it anyways. I'm bad at reviewing smaller things and especially prologues, but I just wanted too say it's really good ...

Oh well that's a surprise. :)

Oh well that's a surprise. :)

A ghost in a dream or just a hallucination can appear however it wants, that's why it wasn't exactly clear. :) Looking forward to it, I noticed how you usually ...

If it was mentioned in part one that's why I didn't know, but considering he and Tiro worked in the same place I'm sure they have met plenty of times. ...

If it was mentioned in part one that's why I didn't know, but considering he and Tiro worked in the same place I'm sure they have met plenty of times. ...

Makes sense, still I look forward to it as a possibility though.

Of course, I always speak my mind. That actually makes more sense, child abuse being the subject. Always happy to review where and when I can too. Us writers have ...

Okay, thank you.

Well then you will love it later in the story, if you like Megan and Kevin. Kevin is based on me, Megan is based on the first person I ever ...

That makes sense then actually, I saw the description but my living in a ghetto made me just think of the word "whack" since people say "that's wack" a ton. ...

I never said anything to suggest I knew more than anyone, I just have firsthand experience from both sides of the topic. And it was long because it was detailed, ...